Since I'm so new to writing, my editing skills are pretty useless. But I can say that I loved this! I thought it was very smooth, very cohesive though it was only a small section. Thanks for posting this!
Originally Posted by Sagesgirl
Here's the thread:
You could certainly post in your blog too, & link to it.
I'm going to go post a section of my work there in just a minute.
I know, I know- I had that idea AFTER I started the thread. I didn't have a blog yet Sorry! I don't often think before acting.
Very cool, MommyHawk!!
Ok, I totally get the mom-thing. I think my mom doesn't believe I'm actually writing, but if she did, she'd probably be hurt if I told her she couldn't read it. People use the "f" word in it- which WILL freak her out. And then theres the matter of an extra-marital affair. She will say "I don't like this, Carolyn"
Your mom is probably cooler. In fact- I'd be willing to bet a thousand dollars she's easier than my mom with this stuff- let her read it!...
Originally Posted by greeny
I'm new to this forum, so I hope you don't mind me jumping in!
My biggest critique of this chapter is that I don't feel enough connection between the two characters to "buy" that she'd go to his hotel and sleep with him after their very brief encounter in the bar. Yes, it's apparent she's known him before (we find that out after reading the rest of the chapter). But I don't feel the attraction, the raw energy, the...
Thats funny- I got the same email and signed up then wimped out when I got the the whole "create your ISBN number". I thought..."I am NOT ready to see this assigned an official number- especially not the first draft"
But, I may still do it. It is free.
Originally Posted by Aufilia
What all are you girls planning to post? Just the first few pages?
I just planted a chapter in there. I hope it's appropriate. I just realized I have no clue what I'm doing, and need criticism.
DH is great at editing, but micro-edits every little thing, so it takes him forever, and he's so busy, I feel bad always saying "read this! Help me! Please!", especially when I have nothing to offer him with my...
You guys- this is awesome input! I need a lot of work. I really have no sense of grammar anymore. Whether something is passive or not completely eludes me. I will do some homework in that department.
Erin- thanks for SO MUCH great input- I loved that. I will check out that website for sure. I don't know how to craft my dialogue correctly.
And allgirls, thanks as well. I didn't want to infodump too much, hoping the questions people had wiuld be interesting enough to...
I'll join. My blog is very, very new. (and in my siggie, btw)
Our old family blog had a ton of followers- due largely to my dh's good writin g and photography. I can't expect my writing blog to be a popular.