My story is about a girl (or woman, I suppose...she's 21) who is obsessed with a boy from her childhood. The inciting incident is her in a bar...and he's there- though she doesn't know it. And yes...she sees ghosts, or, rather, other dimensions.
I love this story, I just want it to be a beautiful thing, like I've always imagined it.
Aren't first lines hard? Here's my first paragraph...maybe the first line isn't clear enough:
"It must be an old bar, because I can see...