Originally Posted by Oriole
I'm not sure how detailed you want the comments to be, but I assume you would want everything that we notice, right?
YES! Don't be shy, you can't hurt my feelings - it's not personal, it's grammar!
Ok, so most commas should be converted into -'s type things maybe...
and the gerund thing...and the tenses... maybe someone can help me with this? I want the first chapter to be totally present tense, and then the next three chapters are flashbacks
but still in the 1st person POV, and then by chapter 4/5 she drifts back to totally present tense as she finds her seat on the plane...any ideas?
I'm so super excited that I have anyone's attention with my story!!!