oooh, Im in way over my head, here.
e e cummings! Darn, I like it! It's not a jumble of words at all, but has a rhythm to it. I esp like,
and the streaming, bleeding end.
(that came out wrong, but you know)
my2girlsmama! What is WRONG with you! Youve been published? What ARE you doing? Dust off that pen and get going! The ones you put up here are great I love the first one! The eyes being used to...heck, I like the way they're used to convey other moods, colors. Can't put it into words. THe seocnd one required thought, and I'm tired, so...
Wolfcat, I knew right away what you were referring to, was sucked in. MAde me feel sad, and brought thoughts of Iraq.
i'm ging to edit mine and make it rhyme.