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A random poem

post #1 of 4
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So I've never posted here. I've never lurked here. In fact, I don't think I've ever clicked on this board before in my life, but I wrote a poem tonight. It's the first poem I've written in years, and I wanted to share it with someone, so I figured I'd share it here.

Mental Chess

I saw me asking for you -
but not really.
You declining.
Me.
Stumbling over bumps in the pavement
with elequent words and comments.
Comments on your actual thoughts;
Versus
your words.
post #2 of 4
Nice!

Doesn't it feel good to get back into something that you either intentionally gave up or just let fall by the wayside? I love to write but it's a rare occasion that I get to!
post #3 of 4
This is a good, sturdy peice that I really liked; however, your use of punctuation is a bit curious, though unique.
post #4 of 4
Thread Starter 
Yeah.. I'm odd with punctuation. Then I look at it and I can't see removing any, so I just left it?
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