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post #1 of 12
1/18/07 at 1:00pm
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HerthElde (Earth Warrior)

I am a warrior,
Recruited by Odinn
to the service of the Gods
Commissioned by Frija
to defend the future bairn.

I carry not spear,
not sword nor shield,
though battle-ready I be
My weapons are my knowledge-lust
My wisdom and my heart

In defense of Midgard
Against Corporate Jotuns
I wield my loom, my yarn, my kitchen skills

In defense of my progeny
Against restrictive paradigms
I wield a healing heart and hand

I am a warrior
I fight for Midgard
I bestow upon my children and
my children's bairn
The strength, ability and desire
to question "Why?"

I am a Warrior.
post #2 of 12
2/3/07 at 2:50pm
Beautiful. I got chills just reading it.
post #3 of 12
2/7/07 at 1:39am
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Thank you Jörð. I am at your service
post #4 of 12
2/11/07 at 3:30pm
Well done!
post #5 of 12
2/22/07 at 8:14pm
I enjoyed this poem. My favorite lines are:

"In defense of my progeny
Against restrictive paradigms
I wield a healing heart and hand"

I can relate well to them, even though baby isn't here yet. Thanks for sharing this.
post #6 of 12
8/9/07 at 9:01am
Beautiful. Powerful.
post #7 of 12
8/13/07 at 4:06pm
oh, very nice.
post #8 of 12
3/23/08 at 4:50pm
Just saw this. Beautiful. Could I put it on my blog? I don't know how to credit you though - your un here? A link to your blog?
post #9 of 12
3/24/08 at 4:46pm
beautiful...i got chills too! I love the line 'I wield my loom, my yarn, my kitchen skills' and the repetition of 'I am a warrior'. I can imagine it as a great performance piece too...do u perform?
post #10 of 12
4/4/08 at 5:19pm
That's beautiful. I got chills reading it, too.
post #11 of 12
4/5/08 at 9:34pm
Love it. I studied medieval German in college & Old Norse in grad school. My only suggestion is that you may wish to use the traditional meter of Old Norse prose-poems, maybe even use the split lines of epic poetry. I agree that this would be terrific for performance.
post #12 of 12
4/5/08 at 9:38pm
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Originally Posted by Fay View Post
Love it. I studied medieval German in college & Old Norse in grad school. My only suggestion is that you may wish to use the traditional meter of Old Norse prose-poems, maybe even use the split lines of epic poetry. I agree that this would be terrific for performance.
Kennings . . . yeah, it's crossed my mind many times to learn, but hasn't happened yet . . .

Thanks so much everyone
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