proofread for me?

[incorrigible]

I just wrote a review for a children's product (at ds's request) and I've never done a review before. I know it's too long...I'm long winded. I don't know where to cut. I asked my son to read it and he just says I used too many big words.

Would someone please be willing to take a look at this thing and give me some advice?

*Is going back to regular articles and avoiding this review nonsense from here on out*

[happyhippiemama]

I'd love to - seeing as how I'm a proofreader by trade (sitting in my cubicle proofing right now, actually - well, not proofing right now, obviously, since I'm on mdc, but ykwim). But you should probably attach it so I can. :

[Sage_SS]

Ditto here too.. I'm a natural editor. I do it all the time... I'd be happy to help out!

[incorrigible]

very cool guys. I pm'd it to both of you. I really appreciate the input.