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Do you have a query that you need help polishing? Think your query is dead on? Do you have what it takes to write a great query? Can you lend a helping hand?

I'm about to do my first query and I'm stumped one minute, then think it's perfect the next...but, alas, I'm chicken...I was going to go to submit mine to the Query Shark but I thought that we woman could give each other a hand first (maybe a more gentle hand ) before we dive into the deep waters of, well, sharks!

anyone not chicken? I think this is about as difficult and important as writing the actual novel!
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Do you have a query that you need help. polishing? Think your query is dead on? Do you have what it takes to write a great query? Can you lend a helping hand?

I'm about to do my first query and I'm stumped one minute, then think it's perfect the next...but, alas, I'm chicken...I was going to go to submit mine to the Query Shark but I thought that we woman could give each other a hand first (maybe a more gentle hand ) before we dive into the deep waters of, well, sharks!

anyone not chicken? I think this is about as difficult and important as writing the actual novel!
I agree that a query letter is uber important. Most are rejected within a minute, even if the actual responses to the author take a week or a few months.

One possible issue is that this is a public forum and if anyone later searches keywords from your query they will see this thread. I workshopped my query for months () in a private forum, and I think I learned a lot from it, and from reading other queries and seeing what kind of feedback they got. So I would love to critique here, but I'm still unsure I want to have my query public on mdc, at the same time as I'm sending it out to agents. But maybe I'm being silly. Tell me I'm being silly. I love critiquing queries!!!!

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yes! my computer hiccuped and the connection was lost...I'll PM you with it and maybe we can help with eachother's queries that way
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This sounds like a very interesting novel! I'll be back with some thoughts later!

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I see where you're going with this! and no, it's not curt...it's necessary! I'll work on this a bit and get a revised copy here. Do you really think this is bad online or ok? I've seen others do it, so I don't see the harm, but then again I'm not a literary agent with an attitude...

I find it's hard to be blunt and to the point since I don't want anyone to know what really happens until they read the actual book...but that really isn't the point of the query, is it... I'm supposed to give the entire book away, hook, line, and sinker, so someone doesn't have to read the whole book to know what happens...I'll keep that in mind when I rework it.

I really appreciate your help...if you think else where online would be safer to do this, let me know.

Thanks!
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I see where you're going with this! and no, it's not curt...it's necessary! I'll work on this a bit and get a revised copy here. Do you really think this is bad online or ok? I've seen others do it, so I don't see the harm, but then again I'm not a literary agent with an attitude...

I find it's hard to be blunt and to the point since I don't want anyone to know what really happens until they read the actual book...but that really isn't the point of the query, is it... I'm supposed to give the entire book away, hook, line, and sinker, so someone doesn't have to read the whole book to know what happens...I'll keep that in mind when I rework it.

I really appreciate your help...if you think else where online would be safer to do this, let me know.

Thanks!
oh good, i was worried, but i'm nakng again LOL
i think in a query--you don't need to tell everything; in the synopsis you do. but you don't have to worry about giving it away in the query, it is just that you won't be albe to reveal everything in a one page query!

and honestly, i don't think anyone will be googling for keywords from a query. i'm probably overly cautious.

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