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#1 of 6 Old 05-04-2007, 10:02 PM - Thread Starter
 
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From What If: Writing Exercises for Fiction Writers

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...Beginners' stories often meander for three or four pages before the story begins to rear its head...(but in many great stories) first sentences put the reader in the middle of things...
Write three opening lines that "start in the middle" for three different stories.

My three samples:

The violets rose with such force from their warm flowerbeds, that you could be forgiven for thinking Margrove was an ambitious town.

Although I'd been waiting for many years for this day to come, I still took the long route to Minnie's cafe.

She wasn't destined for Harvard, and if she had to steal a horse in order to prove this obvious fact, so be it.
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I really like your third one. I want to hear the rest of that story.

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What an awesome exercise! I'm going to write some of these.
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We should share, right? I loved all of your samples, FSM. I think in the first one though, I would just remove the comma - the sentence flows better without it, I think.


Even though I felt sure to my bones that I was about to experience my best evening in years, there was only one thought that kept repeating in my mind: when did ketchup become such a culinary staple?


This was a moment of potential infinite regret... the kind that comes along maybe twice in a lifetime. I knew what I had to do. I knew that if I didn't do it, I would be haunted for the rest of my life by my lack of action. I also knew this was going to go terribly, terribly wrong.

(sorrry, that was a paragraph, not a line.)


She could barely conceal the gleeful smile she felt tickling at her lips knowing that this was the last time he was ever going to get the last word.
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I could not really do it in only one sentence, but here is what I have:

One:
Genevieve pulled her dark cloak tighter around her shoulders. The cold air was billowing with a hint of snow on the wind. What was she going to do? Where was she going to go? She had fled with only one thought; get away before it was too late!

Two:
What do you do when the promises fail? Where do you turn when everything you believed in crashes around your feet? What are you left with when everything you thought turns out to be wrong?
It all started on a beautifully sunny day nearly five years ago.…

Three:
Pulling into the driveway and turning the ignition off, Jessi leaned forward and rested her head on the steering wheel and let out a long sigh. What a long day! I am so glad it is finally over!

Any misspellings or grammatical errors in the above statement are intentional;
they are placed there for the amusement of those who like to point them out.
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1) "This is just too much," I thought, as viscious fat rain drops attacked with such ferocity that it seemed to be raining simultaneously straight up, soaking everything under my useless caution-orange umberella.

2) Piercing obsidian eyes, a flurry of musky daunting wings, there and gone, leaving behind only the smell of ozone and blood in the dark.

3) "I did it! Holy crap," he said half-aloud as his knees buckled and he sank down into the high-grass, "I can't believe I did it..."
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