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Parents of applicants to the Preschool and Lower School (grades PK3 – 5th) : On a separate sheet of paper, please provide any
information regarding your child that you believe would be helpful to the school.
I am at a loss. We are applying to a school for DS and I can't seem to write an effective Parent Statement.
this is what the school wants
this is what I have written thus far.
Andrew is a precocious, physically and mentally adroit child who enjoys the world around him. Even though he is but 2 ½ Andrew enjoys engaging others in conversation, not prone to shyness he eagerly greets friends and strangers alike.
Playing with friends of all ages is one of Andrew’s many hallmarks. His ability to recognize the varying levels of development characteristic to his playmates, Andrew is gentle and patient with younger toddlers, rambunctious with older boys and simply enjoys himself with cohorts.
Andrew thrives when challenged and faced with new experiences. He loves to sing, dance, laugh, but most importantly he is a loving, hugging, altruistic he boy.
Please be honest, and offer feedback. the above is an unedited rough draft.
To be truthful? It sounds like you are trying way to hard. It isn't a college admissions application. He is 2.5. Some of what you've written is very unclear. To start, the bolded sentence makes no sense. Some of your word choices are a bit much. For example, I doubt many 2 year olds are truly "altruistic." To take what you've written, I would rewrite it this way:
Andrew is a very precocious little boy who is advanced in both his verbal and physical skills. He loves having conversations with other people and eagerly greets everyone he meets. Andrew enjoys playing with friends of all ages and is easily able to adapt to each individual's level of development. Andrew thrives when challenged and handles himself well when faced with new experiences. He is a happy, well-adjusted child who loves other people.
Honestly, I spent some time writing one of these for my oldest son when he went to preschool. The second year, I forgot to do it (even though he had a new teacher, and they ask that the parent do it every year).
No one noticed or asked that I complete it. I think they made a big deal about it so parents would think the school "really knew the child" or that the parent was involved.
But I got the sense that no one really read them... maybe if there was a problem or something a teacher might go back and read it, but it wasn't missed.
So I would just dial it down per Heavenly's suggestions... and go play with Andrew.
I've written three of these, and I commiserate with your stress over it!!
I like Heavenly's suggestions. For some reason, I really liked this, "His ability to recognize the varying levels of development characteristic to his playmates, Andrew is gentle and patient with younger toddlers, rambunctious with older boys and simply enjoys himself with cohorts." from your original. Maybe not exactly how it was worded, but the thought behind it made me think, how neat!
Good luck with the admissions process!
Mom to a teenager and a middle schooler.
Mom to a teenager and a middle schooler.
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